Still, a nice story on the one path I walked, but it should be noticed that somewhere along the way, the story forgot that the character was a boy. Maybe me playing a female haad something to do with that, or maybe that's unrelated..

Breaks the Reading of the Lines, with the system forcing lines upon me that are out of character. Also, has a tendency to describe Ava as "Char", or something like that, as if it doesn't properly use a way that will get turned into a name.